- "While surfing the web other night" -> "While browsing the web the other night,"
- "I noticed a great job on your website that am perfect fit for." -> "I noticed a job posting on your website that I believe I am a perfect fit for."
- "really would like?" -> "I would really like to be considered for this position."
Revised cover letter text:
Dear Sir or Madam,
While browsing the web the other night, I noticed a job posting on your website that I believe I am a perfect fit for. I would really like to be considered for this position.
Sincerely,
[Your Name]